Hi Thomas, I am sitting down to evaluate everyone's first blog entry. I have noticed that you have decided to do more of a 'Twitter'-style blog, with several shorter entries. I am not against you opting for this style but I would recommend that you elaborate a little further into each of your posts. This would give your readers a little more information on each news quip.
Also, from a more technical standpoint, please ensure that you capitalize team names, places, proper names,... and include proper punctuation at the end of your sentences. Your blog will look a little more polished if you take the time to revise for proper grammar, etc., prior to publishing online.
Thomas I half to say this blog is really good,I think it could really, really help people (including me)keep up in the world of sports. I also like your formating pretty cool. I also like all the stuff you have but I think you cold maybe put video's and pictures kind of like Jason's blog. Will have any football on this blog? Infact will you have any sports except for hockey and baseball? I'm also with Mme Miles on the fact that maybe you could put more information because the blog seems to lacking someting.I like the colors you used too it's very bright. Also maybe you could put your own opinion in the post. Still I think the blog is pretty good.
Happy Halloween, Thomas!!!
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ReplyDeleteI am sitting down to evaluate everyone's first blog entry. I have noticed that you have decided to do more of a 'Twitter'-style blog, with several shorter entries. I am not against you opting for this style but I would recommend that you elaborate a little further into each of your posts. This would give your readers a little more information on each news quip.
Also, from a more technical standpoint, please ensure that you capitalize team names, places, proper names,... and include proper punctuation at the end of your sentences. Your blog will look a little more polished if you take the time to revise for proper grammar, etc., prior to publishing online.
Keep up the great work!
Thomas I half to say this blog is really good,I think it could really, really help people (including me)keep up in the world of sports. I also like your formating pretty cool. I also like all the stuff you have but I think you cold maybe put video's and pictures kind of like Jason's blog. Will have any football on this blog? Infact will you have any sports except for hockey and baseball? I'm also with Mme Miles on the fact that maybe you could put more information because the blog seems to lacking someting.I like the colors you used too it's very bright. Also maybe you could put your own opinion in the post. Still I think the blog is pretty good.
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